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Babyj4
Advanced Spanko
Username: Babyj4
Post Number: 921
Registered: 09-2005
| | Posted on Friday, October 14, 2005 - 01:21 pm: | 
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She hides inside
denys with pride
the pain she feels
She can not deal
she runs away
till it comes another day
she's built a wall
to hide behind
she longs for relief
she longs to cry
he's strong but scared
does he dare
she beggs him to help
He takes a breath
as she undresses
he grab a chair
though un awair
of all the pain inside
he starts off slow
with tender blows
untill her backside starts to glow
still she sighs
she needs to cry
another breath from deep inside
and then the paddle is applied
harder and firmer
the rythm set
she squirms and wiggles
she's now upset
she starts to wimper
she starts to whine
she lets it out
it blows his mind
the tears now flowing from inside
he sits her up
and holds her tight
the both of them can only cry
Babyj- worlds cutest little brat!
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Smartnnaughty
Spanko
Username: Smartnnaughty
Post Number: 296
Registered: 05-2005
| | Posted on Friday, October 14, 2005 - 07:10 pm: |
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Thank you Babyj!
I try to take one day at a time -- but sometimes several days attack me at once.
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Babyj4
Advanced Spanko
Username: Babyj4
Post Number: 929
Registered: 09-2005
| | Posted on Friday, October 14, 2005 - 07:51 pm: |
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your welcome
Babyj- worlds cutest little brat!
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Babyj4
Advanced Spanko
Username: Babyj4
Post Number: 940
Registered: 09-2005
| | Posted on Friday, October 14, 2005 - 11:47 pm: |
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I am hopeing to get a lot of feed back on this poem, I have been considering publication, but was wondering what others would think, so please let me know. Thanks everyone. 
Babyj- worlds cutest little brat!
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Pagan
Spanko
Username: Pagan
Post Number: 153
Registered: 05-2005
| | Posted on Saturday, October 15, 2005 - 12:24 am: |
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Babyj, I don't read enough poetry to give you a valid opinion.
I like the story, and how things build.
Small thing, but if you're going to submit it anywhere, you might want to run it through a spell check first.  |
Babyj4
Advanced Spanko
Username: Babyj4
Post Number: 941
Registered: 09-2005
| | Posted on Saturday, October 15, 2005 - 01:02 am: |
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yah I will, I can't spell very well, and I'm dislecsic
Babyj- worlds cutest little brat!
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Tmichellebrat
New member
Username: Tmichellebrat
Post Number: 9
Registered: 10-2005
| | Posted on Saturday, October 15, 2005 - 10:36 am: |
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Hi Babyj4 ...I like the poem. I have written several poems myself and have had them published ...this poem of yours is a good one and you should consider publishing it. Nice work. |
Ziggy
Advanced Spanko
Username: Ziggy
Post Number: 612
Registered: 08-2005
| | Posted on Saturday, October 15, 2005 - 06:36 pm: |
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very good baby, I love this one the best |
Tanjas_brat
New member
Username: Tanjas_brat
Post Number: 2
Registered: 10-2005
| | Posted on Saturday, October 15, 2005 - 07:43 pm: |
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BABY-- AWESOME POEM!! YOU SHOULD PUBLISH IT }}:-) |
Babyj4
Advanced Spanko
Username: Babyj4
Post Number: 947
Registered: 09-2005
| | Posted on Monday, October 17, 2005 - 09:39 am: |
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thanks guys, keep it coming
Babyj- worlds cutest little brat!
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Shylah
New member
Username: Shylah
Post Number: 12
Registered: 10-2005
| | Posted on Tuesday, October 18, 2005 - 03:41 pm: |
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It is a very good poem, Babyj4. Keep at it. I am also dyslexic but have strived over the years to overcome the spelling and it has not been easy. Just take it one word at a time and it gets easier. (I'm still CRAP with numbers!!!) 
I DIDN'T DO IT!! I'm innocent I tell ya!! INNOCENT!! TRUST ME!!!
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Babyj4
Supreme Spanko
Username: Babyj4
Post Number: 1079
Registered: 09-2005
| | Posted on Tuesday, October 18, 2005 - 05:13 pm: |
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thanks Shylah
Babyj- worlds cutest little brat!
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Shylah
New member
Username: Shylah
Post Number: 36
Registered: 10-2005
| | Posted on Wednesday, October 19, 2005 - 12:08 pm: |
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anytime sweetie!!!
I DIDN'T DO IT!! I'm innocent I tell ya!! INNOCENT!! TRUST ME!!!
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Tammynx
New member
Username: Tammynx
Post Number: 44
Registered: 10-2005
| | Posted on Sunday, October 23, 2005 - 07:55 pm: |
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It is a beautiful poem!! I hope you get it published!!!  |
Hunnybunny
Supreme Spanko
Username: Hunnybunny
Post Number: 1176
Registered: 07-2005
| | Posted on Sunday, October 23, 2005 - 07:59 pm: |
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I love it, Babyj!
The best way to behave is not to
-Abercrombie & Fitch
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Babyj4
Supreme Spanko
Username: Babyj4
Post Number: 1611
Registered: 09-2005
| | Posted on Monday, October 24, 2005 - 08:18 pm: |
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thank everyone
Babyj- worlds cutest little brat!
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Master60s_pet
New member
Username: Master60s_pet
Post Number: 49
Registered: 10-2005
| | Posted on Tuesday, October 25, 2005 - 09:07 am: |
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I think you should too. Someone told me I should get the Pit copywritten and published. I know how to copywright but not sure how to publish.
MASTER60{master60's_pet}
I am a blessed brat..I am well loved and taken care of.
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Babyj4
Supreme Spanko
Username: Babyj4
Post Number: 1654
Registered: 09-2005
| | Posted on Tuesday, October 25, 2005 - 09:19 am: |
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well I did a quick search on publishing companies. Typed it up and mailed it in.
Babyj- worlds cutest little brat!
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Tammynx
Junior Spanko
Username: Tammynx
Post Number: 71
Registered: 10-2005
| | Posted on Wednesday, October 26, 2005 - 01:30 pm: |
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Let us know when you hear back!! Good Luck!!! |
Hugh
New member
Username: Hugh
Post Number: 2
Registered: 10-2005
| | Posted on Friday, November 11, 2005 - 01:46 am: |
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Dear Babyj4,
I am not very computer literate and I
have been trying to contact you. I am the 78 yr.
old retired English teacher, very happily married
with my wife in a home with dementia. I do hope I
did not offend you by correcting your spelling! It
is the WRITING that counts! Tou have a delightful
style of writing and I want to encourage you! So,
please write MORE! You said in your e-mail to get
back yo you. I feel so lonely without my darling
Thelma! <antonynicholas@shaw.ca> As ever. Antony. |
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